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Title: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on October 30, 2013, 06:13:46 AM

I must give credit to my friend Harold Wyman for telling me his dream and naming the song. ;D

Also, my husband gets credit for arranging the basic structure. My original structure was verse, chorus, verse, chorus, bridge , chorus, like everything I write! haha. Thanks Bruce Dovidio!

This structure allowed Frank's (Zax) guitars to perfectly express the emotions in the lyrics. I could listen to Frank's guitar playing all day.  8)
 What a perfect collab!
Andy came along and surprised me with beautiful strings and keys! The bass line is awesome too  8)
Steve (Albino) rocked out on the drums ! Sweet. 8)

Mark, Frank and Steve added the male vocal that the song called for. Great fun! I've never written a song like this before, but I'm amazed at you guys!

Tricia Dovidio (c)2013
Inspired by Harold Wyman's dream

Guitars, backup vocals and mixing - Zax- Frank J. Zax
Bass, Keys, Leslie Guitar- Andy Gupta
Drums, backup vocals- Steve Smith
Backup vocals- Mark Shrider
Vocals- Tricia Dovidio

The Prison of my Dreams
Tricia Dovidio (c)2013
 
Awakened    
to the harsh reality
That is my life
Aware
of the flawed destiny
That I designed

pre:                                
I live and breathe
 and make my choices  
I go to sleep,
escape the voices

And I dream..

interlude:

pre:
by day, I won't lie
or break my vows
in dream, I'm guiltless
having you now


Ch:

I knew you once
I loved you over and over
You held me captive
in beautiful desire
I was nothing
never part of your grand scheme
But I see you
In the prison of my dreams



bridge:

I'm bound, shackled by your love
I'm innocent, can't help what I dream of
it's not my fault if I love you, over and over
 in my dreams

solo

verse 2:
I appear
Much more lovely
In black and white
You can't help
but To be drawn to me
In the night
AHH

Ch:
I knew you once
I loved you over and over
You held me captive
in beautiful desire
I was nothing
never part of your grand scheme
But I see you
In the prison of my dreams




agressive outro:

I knew you once
I loved you then
you said goodbye
it's not the end
I knew you once
I loved you then
you said goodbye
it's not the end
I see you now
you love me again
in the prison (not guilty)
in the prison (have mercy
in the prison (in the prison)
i the prison (you want me-
in my dreams

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Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: stoman on October 30, 2013, 08:02:35 AM

Nice work, Lady and Gentlemen! I like the structure and the progressive touch of the composition and arrangement. All the parts fit nicely.

Regards,
  Steffen

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on October 30, 2013, 08:06:16 AM

Thanks Steffen! :)

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Zax on October 30, 2013, 08:55:13 AM

Steffen... Thanks very much for listening and commenting.   :)

Tricia... Credit for the Leslie Guitar part should go to Andy.

Once again, this was a real pleasure to work on.  I feel truly privileged to be part of such a great project.  Thank you so much for including me, Tricia!

Tricia, Andy, Steve, and Mark... You're contributions to this are truly excellent IMHO!!

I really love the way it turned out... I love everything about it!   :)

Thank you,
Frank

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on October 30, 2013, 09:03:29 AM

Quote from: Zax on October 30, 2013, 08:55:13 AM

Tricia... Credit for the Leslie Guitar part should go to Andy.

OK! Not sure who Leslie is, but I added that to the credits.  :D ;D

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: docca3 on October 30, 2013, 09:13:13 AM

Ah, that Leslie's getting around a bit now!!!

Great song - love the overall sound - that's another one for the mp3 player :D

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: AndyG6508 on October 30, 2013, 10:05:43 AM

hey gang, good to see this one on here!!

A fantastic collab to be involved with where do I start..

Tricia - You said amazing, you're amazing :). Fantastic write and vocal, one of your most interesting songs perhaps? I really like the arrangement with the alternating soft and heavy sections, prog rock like as Steffen mentioned.

Frank - You led this ship with grace and panache. The guitar playing is awesome, lovely tone, chops, and some memorable lines. The harmony gtr part is achingly beautiful, and the main guitar solo is very well thought out and has some serious technique at work there  8). The mix is fantastic as well, you wove the many parts into a right blend.

Steve - you have been pulling off some great drum tracks lately, but this one is right up there on top. You made it the rhythm part interesting with those accents and pushes (which I like in a song), all I had to do was follow the groove you laid down. The verses are rock solid (great drums sound) , and the last part of the outro is particularly brilliant.

Mark - Your voice (along with Frank and Steve) suited this pefectly. You are proving to be an asset on MCS with your musical skills, selfless attitude and equable nature.

Thanks for letting me be a part of this woinderful song and crew.

I hope we wont be dreaming too much about Leslie, (they are showing Nightmare on Elm Street on cable lately!!).

Andy

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: PVD on October 30, 2013, 12:04:18 PM

Everyone:

Well done, love the concept and the journey.

Paul

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on October 30, 2013, 02:01:59 PM

Thanks Docca3 and PVD!  :) :)

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: rightonthemark on October 30, 2013, 03:25:37 PM

this turned out great.
 everyone turned in great performances.
and the mix brought it all together perfectly.
from the cold lonely sound of the guitar at the intro through the heavier chorus and ripping leads to the full on huge sound toward the end.
don't even get me started on Tricia's vocals --- absolutely superb.
to be honest i wasn't so sure the male backing vocals were going to work...i really struggled on that...but it set in the mix just right and works pretty well; especially the in the prison part.

and Andy...i love your well thought out critiques.

at the end of the day this just a killer tune with a killer sound...proud to have played even a small role.

nice job by all.

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on October 30, 2013, 04:26:23 PM

I appreciate the compliments on  my vocal track. I hear my flaws, but OH WELL! haha You guys make me sound better!
I must have listened to this song about 20 times already.
I'm not sick of it yet!  :D ;D

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Paulo on October 31, 2013, 05:20:24 AM

Great song, that's all.

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on October 31, 2013, 05:58:55 AM

Thanks Paulo!  :-*

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Donna on November 01, 2013, 09:30:39 AM

Really fine work all round, lads & lass. :) Interesting song, and impressive arrangement, music and performance. I love the image 'prison of my dreams'. ;)

Donna

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Zax on November 01, 2013, 09:44:28 AM

Docca3, Paul, Paulo and Donna... Thanks very much for listening and commenting!   :)

Tricia, Mark and Andy... Thanks again for your kind words!   :)

Regards,
Frank

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Albino on November 03, 2013, 08:23:18 AM

Well Tricia   8) I will stick my neck out and say this is possibly the best song you have written, certainly the best I have collaborated on. Frank's awesome guitar along with your vocals made it easy for my to get into the groove and the more I played along the more I got into this song.
Very well witten and excellent structure. You should be proud Tricia.  ;D

Steve.

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Albino on November 03, 2013, 08:45:18 AM

Quote from: AndyG6508 on October 30, 2013, 10:05:43 AM

hey gang, good to see this one on here!!



Steve - you have been pulling off some great drum tracks lately, but this one is right up there on top. You made it the rhythm part interesting with those accents and pushes (which I like in a song), all I had to do was follow the groove you laid down. The verses are rock solid (great drums sound) , and the last part of the outro is particularly brilliant.



Andy

Thanks Andy but TBH the vox and guitars I tracked to made it easy for me.  8)
But I gotta say that your bass is really tight but what you did to the song with those awesome strings was genius. It completed the song IMHO and maybe should have been used at the beginning as well as the end.
 8)

Steve.

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on November 03, 2013, 10:26:06 AM

Thanks Steve! You guys really shine on this! I got a few people  online asking for a video to go with it!
If anyone wants to try making a video or slideshow for this, feel free.  ;)

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: soulfrontier on November 03, 2013, 10:30:07 AM

You said it Tricia:
What a perfect collab!

Great song and outstanding performance by all involved!

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on November 03, 2013, 10:41:21 AM

Thanks so much, Holgier! :)

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Albino on November 26, 2013, 06:20:31 PM

I feel the need to say that this is one of my favourite collabs so far !!  8) 8)

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on November 26, 2013, 07:32:34 PM

Thanks for saying it! I love what you added Steve!

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on December 14, 2013, 06:49:08 AM

I'm trying to create a video/slideshow for this song. I'm just stealing google images and stuff, hope I don't get sued!  :-* ;)

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: AndyG6508 on December 15, 2013, 12:34:28 PM

Look forward to it Tricia. You will only get sued if your song becomes famous or if it makes you money :)

Andy

Quote from: Tricia41 on December 14, 2013, 06:49:08 AM

I'm trying to create a video/slideshow for this song. I'm just stealing google images and stuff, hope I don't get sued!  :-* ;)

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on December 15, 2013, 12:35:10 PM

 ;D

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4SpHj3FpkO4

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: AndyG6508 on December 16, 2013, 10:26:06 AM

Thanks for posting Tricia, I enjoyed the presentation :)

Andy

Quote from: Tricia41 on December 15, 2013, 12:35:10 PM

;D

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4SpHj3FpkO4

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Zax on December 16, 2013, 09:20:19 PM

Quote from: Tricia41 on December 15, 2013, 12:35:10 PM

;D

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4SpHj3FpkO4

 8)

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: rightonthemark on December 16, 2013, 10:53:06 PM

very cool Tricia.
nice video.
\m/

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: CosmicDolphin on December 18, 2013, 06:35:47 PM

This one had me from the first bar  8)

Great vocal delivery Tricia, you've never sounded better than you do on this.

The song opens up nicely as it builds and takes a few unexpected turns, all the parts go really well with the vibe of the song and it's top off by a sweet mix.

Well done to everyone involved - IT's songs like this that make it worth listening to every song in the Finished Thread.

I am off for another list :)

CD 

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on December 18, 2013, 06:37:42 PM

Thanks so much! These guys captured the emotion perfectly!

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Zax on December 19, 2013, 08:48:39 AM

Quote from: soulfrontier on November 03, 2013, 10:30:07 AM

You said it Tricia:
What a perfect collab!

Great song and outstanding performance by all involved!

Quote from: CosmicDolphin on December 18, 2013, 06:35:47 PM

This one had me from the first bar  8)

Great vocal delivery Tricia, you've never sounded better than you do on this.

The song opens up nicely as it builds and takes a few unexpected turns, all the parts go really well with the vibe of the song and it's top off by a sweet mix.

Well done to everyone involved - IT's songs like this that make it worth listening to every song in the Finished Thread.

I am off for another list :)

CD 

Thanks very much Holger and CD, for listening and for the nice comments!   :)

Frank

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Albino on January 12, 2014, 06:42:17 PM

 >:D I love this tune  >:D

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on January 12, 2014, 06:59:49 PM

 ;D yay! I'm so glad! :)

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: DrumGuy on January 28, 2014, 04:19:16 PM

Beautiful song and great performances from everyone. Tricia, your vocals on this are fantastic. Really reminds me of Heart and she's an incredible vocalist.

Bravo!  ;D

Mark

Title: Re: The Prison of my Dreams: Zax, Andy, Albino, Rightonthemark, Tricia
Post by: Tricia41 on January 28, 2014, 04:21:04 PM

Thanks Mark! :)