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Gimme Your Love (upbeat/pop-rock) (Tom/Donna)

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Some of you know I take part in a songwriting challenge each February (FAWM at fawm.org). The challenge is to write 14 songs in 28 days. My first quick lyric there was a tongue-in-cheek pop-rock thing that I asked one of my fellow-FAWMers to collaborate on. I think he did a great job. I hope you enjoy this bit of tom-foolery. ;)

Music/arrangement/vocals: Tom Morton
Lyrics: Donna Devine


Gimme Your Love

V1
I was sick and tired of everything
When I called last night from jail
But I know you get up early
Feed the cat and read your mail

Lift
Now I'm hopin' for clarification
On our present situation

Chorus
Will you gimme, gimme, gimme gimme
Gimme your love?
When I'm out of here
Will my word be enough?
I'll stay out of trouble
Oh tell me on the double
You'll gimme, gimme, gimme your love

V2
Was a fool to hit that other guy
Knew he had some kind of plan
But I hated how he watched you
Hopin' he could be your man

Lift
Now I'm lookin' for edification
Just a tiny declaration

Chorus
Will you gimme, gimme, gimme
Gimme your love?
When I'm out of here
Will my word be enough?
I'll stay out of trouble
Oh tell me on the double
You'll gimme, gimme, gimme your love

Bridge
Wooah woooah woooah
Turnin over a new leaf, baby that's me
Gonna uproot the whole damn tree!

Chorus
Will you gimme, gimme, gimme, gimme
Gimme your love?
When I'm out of here
Will my word be enough?
I'll stay out of trouble
Oh tell me on the double
You'll gimme, gimme, gimme your love

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« Last Edit: April 16, 2014, 02:35:46 PM by Donna »
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Nice, good work! I like the guitar sound. Overall a little too loud for my sensible ears (mastering), but still a great song and mix.

No need to mention the lyrics. :)

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Thank you, Steffen. :) Yes, Tom's a great guitarist.  

it was a very quick composition. Tom threw it together in just a couple of hours. (Time is at a premium during the challenge. ;) )

The lyric theme is a little odd, but I was going for quirky. ;)

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a catchy little pop/punk tune.
i like the guitar as well.
nice job.
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Mark and Tricia, thanks so much for listening and commenting. :)
I'm glad you enjoyed the song. ;)

Donna
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Hi Donna,

An enjoyable listen, quite punkish. Like the droll lyric.

Andy



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Very "Pulp" in it's style and delivery (imagine Jarvis Cocker.)

I think the mix and production is spot on.

I like the lyrics, Donna. I'm warming to this guy in the song. He's worried about his relationship with his girl and is obviously showing remorse after hitting some guy. Good lad.

Rustled up in 2 hours  :o That is good going.


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Very cool Donna!

Catchy and the performance is good.

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Andy, Doc, Billy, and Nick, sorry to be late thanking you all. :)

I"m glad you got a kick out of the song. ;)

Donna
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