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Title: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Vincent on January 11, 2009, 04:01:50 PM

EDITED:...Redid mix...second mp3 in attachments sounds better on mp3 player.

Members invloved in this collab are.

Vincent (Composer,Guitar,Vocal melody,lyrics,mix)
Tricia (Vocals,Lyrics,Vocal melody)
Smurf (Drums,Bass

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Seventeen

It was a starlit night
And the moon was shining bright
all we needed  you and me
We were only seventeen

Summer days spent on the beach
all our dreams within our reach
I had you and you had me
we were only seventeen

what crazy lives young hearts lead
 seventeen

In your car,everywhere we'd go
singing loud with the radio
all we needed you and me
We were only seventeen

one night when the mood was right
you were looking into my eyes
we made a promise we didn't keep
we were only seventeen

what crazy lives young hearts lead
seventeen

We told each other
Way back then
We's be together
Till the end
But this is now
And that was then
broken hearts at seventeen
Will mend

another boy started coming around
I thought I might be missing out
so that was when I let you go
the ending of our dream

the pain was showing on your face
but very soon I was replaced
I was sorry a little too late
I was only seventeen

what crazy lives young hearts lead
 seventeen

We told each other
Way back then
We's be together
Till the end
But this is now
And that was then
broken hearts at seventeen
Can mend

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Tricia41 on January 15, 2009, 09:55:18 AM

Here is a comment from a songwriting forum about this song.:





" I really liked that one!  I think you guys really caught the age.  When a song takes the listener back to the time the writers talking about, if even for an instant, the writer has done his or her job.  I was there for the whole tune.  It's a catchy melody too.  Well done!"
 

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Vincent on January 15, 2009, 10:20:41 AM

 :)

Love hearing those songwriter comments...I take more pride in the writing of the song than the actual playing parts like guitar and what not.

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Tricia41 on January 15, 2009, 10:25:07 AM

Me too Vincent. I always wonder if my mind is going to the right place when writing lyrics.
And you always get the songs started with a great theme. :)

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Tricia41 on January 15, 2009, 10:38:17 AM

more comments, kinda silly. :D


Tricia, I love the weekly rock entries, another fantastic job on this all around.  I also compliment juice... he, behind a mixerboard, with an array of effects, is like Da Vinci behind a canvas with paint and brush.







Thanks!. Juice does not mix though, and he doesn't play in this song.

This was all Vincent .





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  Posted: Thu Jan 15th, 2009 11:25 am  Quote   Reply   PM 
 
 My mistake!  Would that be "Da Vincent"

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Studioplayer on January 15, 2009, 11:17:44 AM

Nice one guys.  8)  Has a bit of an 80's flavour to it. Very upbeat and straight ahead. Your just a singin' machine Tricia. Very versatile. Nice!!  :)

Dave

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Tricia41 on January 15, 2009, 11:19:10 AM

Thanks Dave. :)

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: AndyG6508 on January 15, 2009, 01:22:38 PM

Solid!!!

Nice 80-ish feel - kind of a mix between Blondie and The Tourists.

Great vocal Tricia, and the instrumentation is spot on!

Another one for the ipod...

Cheers
Andy

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Vincent on January 15, 2009, 05:00:16 PM

Thanks for the comments

I redid mix...second mp3 in attachments in first post sounds better on mp3 player.

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: CosmicDolphin on January 16, 2009, 01:56:53 PM

Reminds me of when I had the first Debbie Harry solo album on tape !

Nice vibe to it ...good one gang.

CD

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Tricia41 on January 16, 2009, 02:03:39 PM

Thanks guys! :)

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Tricia41 on January 19, 2009, 07:09:16 AM

Some comments from open mic Friday:


"Tricia, you are " rockin", cool song. Seventeen-1967- Really like this one.Works with any year the listener was Seventeen.

Oh! and sounds good too. "

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"Tricia, it's no secret that I like your voice and it sounds great in this as usual.  I like the rock version of Tricia - and I agree that you could probably sing the heck out of some Heart songs.   The only thing that struck me about this is that I wished the vox were a bit more out front (louder than everything else) in places.  Great song and vocal. "

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Vincent on January 19, 2009, 01:42:07 PM

 :)

Thanks for posting the comments Tricia.

Eventually i will get the vocal level right in the mix... 8)...hopfully.

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: soulfrontier on January 19, 2009, 02:25:58 PM

nice song, it reminds me on Blondie  ;) well done!

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Reba1994 on January 19, 2009, 02:34:42 PM

nice song

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Tricia41 on January 19, 2009, 02:35:26 PM

Thanks Holger and Reba. This one seemed to get done quickly. :)

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Stoney on January 19, 2009, 02:54:50 PM

Hey Guys

Very nice tune ..it does take you back ...I cant remember my teens but I got part way back LOL

Another fine vocal Tricia..... great stuff

Ian

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Tricia41 on January 22, 2009, 05:47:11 AM

Thanks Ian.  ;D I still feel like I'm 17.  ;D   until I look in the mirror. ::)

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: AndyG6508 on January 22, 2009, 10:48:59 AM

Quote from: Tricia41 on January 22, 2009, 05:47:11 AM

Thanks Ian.  ;D I still feel like I'm 17.  ;D   until I look in the mirror. ::)

and then you feel 16 all over again!!
Andy

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Tricia41 on January 22, 2009, 10:52:14 AM

 ;D ;D ;D ;)   Alright.....I'll pay you  later. ;) ;D

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: srvfender on January 24, 2009, 05:59:02 AM

Agree on the 80's vibe. Nice job :)

AJ

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: canuk62 on January 24, 2009, 01:42:09 PM

Great song, does bring you right there...does its job. Got that late 70's-80's feel...I get a bit of the Cars vibe from it...very cool! ;D You guys just blasted this out in record time as well...nice when that happens! :)
Marc

Title: Re: Seventeen (Tricia41,Vincent,Smurf)
Post by: Vincent on January 28, 2009, 01:44:36 AM

Thanks for the comments.

 :)