Musicians Collaboration Studio
Virtual Music Studio => Finished Works => Topic started by: Donna on May 04, 2009, 11:15:25 AM
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Music/Arrangement/Guitar: Bobby Clohessy
Vocals: Gerry Casey
Bass/Keys: Andy Gupta
Drums: Todd Kane
Mix: Nick Testa
Lyrics: Donna Devine
The lyric idea began to germinate several months ago after I came across a quote from the British actor/writer, Peter Ustinov: "Parents are the bones on which children sharpen their teeth". Yikes! :o
Donna
Sharpen Our Teeth on Your Bones
(v1)
We take no prisoners, feel no compassion
Make you accountable, mercy's no option
Hold you to promises you broke long ago
When you ruled with false power, but we didn't know
Chorus
We're children rising up
Coming into our own
Bent on retribution
We want restitution
We'll sharpen our teeth
On your bones
(v2)
Nobody warned us life was a battle
You hated each other, trapped us in the middle
You gave us no weapons, so we've fashioned our own
Anyone sinned against, we will cast the first stone
Chorus
We're children rising up
Coming into our own
Bent on retribution
We want restitution
We'll sharpen our teeth
On your bones
Instrumental solo
(v3)
No parental control, we had a latchkey
Video console games, teenage ADD
Crouched in our darkness, frightened and alone
Now we are angry, we're coming after your bones
Bridge
Ritalin solution, no absolution
Offspring revolution
Chorus
We're children rising up
Coming into our own
Bent on retribution
We want restitution
We'll sharpen our teeth
On your bones
Repeat chorus
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Donna,
It was great to be part of an A-1 team for this one.
The lyrics were spot on, covering a difficult subject....and then band really pulled it off with some super performances from the musicians - Bobby, Gerry and Todd!!!
I think the song packs an emotional and musical wallop!!!
Thanks for having me along.....
Well done! Love this song!
Best regards
Andy
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This turned out great,.. good job everyone!! ;)
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Thanks, Jay. :) The guys did a sensational job, with Gerry really nailing the vocals, and of course Nick bringing out the best of everything/everyone in the final mix.
Lyric-wise, the song sure isn't a "comfortable" or "feel-good" one. :P
Still, here are some comments ;):
Donna
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Very thought provoking indeed. I could hear the Van Halen'ish quality in the singer's voice too. Good job. I'm gonna have my son (15) listen to this later I think he will really like it. (Vicki)
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Nice rockin' tune
STRONG singer/good write. (Calvin)
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Sounds good, kind of like Van Halen. (Steve)
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WOW, very cool and scary and true.
You've got some great lines in here.
Musically, the vocal and instrumentation were right-on-target.
Simply marvelous.
They conveyed that sense of Teenage Angst to perfection. (Beth)
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Guys, a couple more kudos rolling in... ;)
Donna
Interesting lyric with an unusual but striking hook, catches
right off the mark and the melody rocks, Gerry's vocals are
on the money and the rest of the guys did really a good job,
I must confess had a little headbang going on to this. (Tony)
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Great track, super production. a very cool idea and write! (Jerwolf)
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Donna,
its nice to get a few good reviews in ;)
Cheers
Andy
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Hi Donna,
These are great comments indeed, makes it all worth while :) :)
Thanks for the collab, I enjoyed every aspect of it. 8)
Bobby
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Bobby, it was a real pleasure to work with you. :)
And another comment has just trickled past... ;)
Donna
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Dig this, Donna......
The sound reminds me of Triumph, Michael Schenker, Deep Purple, Dio.....
Excellent.... (Sam)
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A great sound guys ...very hot tune
Well done
Ian
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Hi Donna
Great to see all the interest in "Sharpen", it is such an unusual song lyrically, many thanks for letting us have a bash at it. Be good to team up again sometime, must get this throat of mine in order first!
Cheers!
Gerry
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Hot Stuff Guys! Love that classic rock, you guys do it well! :)
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A couple more kudos for you guys. ;)
Knowing that this isn't a typical sing-along or feel-good song (I expect plenty of people will hate the lyric and/or the attitude ;D ), I'm pleased when someone takes time to comment, especially on the music/vocals/production, giving praise where it's due. ;)
Donna
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Sure is an intense message and an all Around great production of it. Feels very in the moment. Nice job Everyone. :) (Joice)
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My son liked it a lot...I knew when I heard it the first time that he would enjoy it; these type of lyrics help him through the teenage angst he suffers from on occasion. He especially liked the chorus. Your hook can't help but to grab attention. Very nice in an angry sort of way. ;) (Vicki)
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Pretty far out of my territory but it seems like good music and delivery in the genre it's intended for.
I expect it would play quite well in certain places. (Wy)
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Donna,
Its so nice to read the appreciative reviews - from so many people as well!!
I love the lyric/song myself!
Cheers
Andy
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Hello Donna,
Peter Ustinov is a wise man :), I know that he's right. ;D
great song and lyrics! Congratulation to you all :)
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Thanks, Andy. ;)
We're still garnering kudos, lads! :D
Donna
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Well written, and great music. (Diane)
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Great production, I enjoyed my listen. (Jerry)
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Tight as a drum! It rocks! (RJC)
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Whatever happened to pacifiers? ;D
Wow - wee this guy can BELT a song!
I really like the bridge, lyrically. BIG SOUND on this 'un! (Anne)
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Whew, quite the observation/message in your lyrics! Strong images! I'm going to remember this one! I like the production too, and can even hear it much bigger and wilder! You've got a nice one here! (Dillon)
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Thanks, Holger. :) And Ustinov definitely knew what he was talking about. ;D
Donna
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Another few words of praise trickling in... ;)
You guys can really be proud of yourselves!
Donna
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AWESOME LYRICS ;) Well written.Thought provoking indeed.Enjoyed Da Listen.Loving it right up. :) RADIO READY ;) BIG BIG BIG HIT ;) IMHO. ROCK ON ;) (Yrral Mallik)
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It rocks. Wild and untamed and full of energy. Nice dynamics and good textures. The changes in the dynamics of the vocals are effective. Good development. (Tom)
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Very Smart song. LOVE the title (image & Hook-y-ness) AND The Band sounds GREAT !!! The Story is Solid and the Music ROCKS !!! (Randy)
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Hey Donna,
It's thrilling to read the continued good reviews!
Andy
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Loved to listen...
All in place... Vocals just right.
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Back...
loved it for the 20th time I listened...
Andy... Damn, I'm sorry I never listened to you closely but, you're a god damn keyboardist :o
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Cool tune! Love the feel and Mix! Great job everyone involved!! 8)
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Back...
loved it for the 20th time I listened...
Andy... Damn, I'm sorry I never listened to you closely but, you're a god damn keyboardist :o
hey Paulo,
Thanks so much for the kind comments. I'm thrilled that you like the keyboard parts, Im really dig your cool keyboards/synth lines....hope to hear more of your work on MCS soon!!
Cheers
Andy
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Cool tune! Love the feel and Mix! Great job everyone involved!! 8)
Thanks Bill, it was good to get those rock jams out!! :D
Andy
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Cool tune. Has me tapping my toes. Love this groove. Nice little solo. Good vocals. Can't beat Todd on the skins. Sounds really great!! Love this!! 8)
Dave
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Paulo, Bill, and Dave, thanks! :)
Guys, another kudo below for you. ;)
Donna
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A chilling observation indeed!
CHILDREN POWER... Watch out for children ;)
Great write and cool performance.
That singer really delivers.
Love it. (Ken)
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And another kudo for you lot. ;)
Donna
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Scary thought. (I'm glad my teenaged son came back to give me a hug
on his way out the door, before I listened to this one. ;) )
Great song, though. It really delivers a wallop. (Sheila)
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And another kudo for you lot. ;)
Donna
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Scary thought. (I'm glad my teenaged son came back to give me a hug
on his way out the door, before I listened to this one. ;) )
Great song, though. It really delivers a wallop. (Sheila)
Great going Donna,
I never tire of listening to this song, and I never tire of being praised :D
Andy
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And another recently in... ;)
(Everyone loves a wee pat on the back, Andy. :) )
Donna
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This one ROCKS!
Excellent! (Nathan)
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A few more words of praise for our song, guys. :)
Donna
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Absolutely great ...I think you got a rockin' winner here.
Excellent lyrics...This is really, really good. (Tom Y.)
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Great singer! I think the lyrics are very intelligently written
and not afraid to tackle a subject that some may not want
to look at. Much respect to you. (Brian)
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It's got angst! And Alice Cooper style acerbic wit. I like it. (John)
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Cool song, I enjoyed that. 8)
AJ
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Thanks for dropping by, AJ. Glad you enjoyed the song. ;)
Lads, we've garnered a few more accolades. :) Thrilling to know that people appreciate the hard work and dedication that you all put into this song. :)
Donna
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Guitar sings right from the start, sweet. Nice driving rock tune. Cool vocal. Great Album Rock. Nice one. (Jeff)
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Rocks good, tells a hard story. Enjoyed. (Mike P.)
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Hey, Donna, you surprised me with this one in this style.
Everyone involved did a wonderful job. My compliments to the musicians, the singer,the engineer and of course to you.
Some very cool lyrics in here, great job, Donna.
Now for the song! ;) Okay you have succeeded here on the professional end of things. You have something in this that you can pitch for film/TV.
This is because of the level you took everything to and the work invested in it.
Great move! You will ALWAYS command respect when your songs come across like this. (Mike C.)
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Great lyric! Very intense message...and I think it's very relevant today. And the music has all that energy there to express those feelings in the lyric. (Kristi)
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Really good song. Enjoyed my listen. I was thinking Eddie Van Halen as I listened. The lyric and performance are both filled with tension and angst. Bonus points for that! This is top shelf. Nice job. (Al)
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My goodness Donna, you are a little bent. A necessary ingredient in a songwriter. ;)
I always liked your work. Now I like how you think. Good write. (Tom)
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This is really fabulous and "rockin'"!! You did a fantastic job with the lyrics. You can definitely feel the energy, and the angst in this one.
Very good write and production. (Gail)
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Kudos for making a hard rock song with an intelligent lyric. (Scott)
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Donna,
It's wonderful to read the continued kind reviews.
And it's true that your lyric and Bobby's bedtrack made a great fit!!
Cheers
Andy
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Very very good...everything is top notch ;)
Nice mix , I like the drum sound Nick 8)
CD
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Thanks CD!
Very very good...everything is top notch ;)
Nice mix , I like the drum sound Nick 8)
CD
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Very very good...everything is top notch ;)
Nice mix , I like the drum sound Nick 8)
CD
Ditto ;)