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Title: Sweet Agony
Post by: rightonthemark on August 19, 2013, 07:39:20 PM
Sweet Agony

I've gotten older
and my mind plays games
where there once was ice
(but) now I see flames

anyway --- it's okay
I see flashes of you
everyday --- I'm afraid
once they start to fad

when it comes down to you
I'm a little confused
was I using you
or was I being used

anyway --- it's okay
'cause you're so sweet
everyday --- I'm afraid
of the agony

I'll be a slave to the games of my mind
bound up together with the ties that bind
longing for the sweetness I left behind
sweet agony

looking over at you
I see your piercing eyes
once again I get confused
between the truth and your lies

anyway --- it's okay
I see flashes of you
everyday --- I'm afraid
once they start to fade

I'll be a slave to the games of my mind
bound up together with the ties that bind
longing for the sweetness I left behind
sweet agony

it doesn't matter
I am numb to the pain
always thinking of you
over and over again

anyway --- it's okay
'cause you're so sweet
everyday --- I'm afraid
of the agony

I'll be a slave to the games of my mind
bound up together with the ties that bind
longing for the sweetness I left behind
sweet agony

Paul Dempsey (PVD) - lyrics
Andy Gupta (AndyG6508) - bass
Steve (Albino) - drums
Mark Shrider (rightonthemark) - music, guitar, vox, mix

thanks Paul for great lyrical stories & pictures (sorry i always seem to rewrite to make it fit my vox).
thanks Andy for the bottom end & your general input.
thanks Steve for clean drum seps & a killer performance to bring this tune home.

it's been a pleasure working with each of you & getting another tune completed.
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: PVD on August 19, 2013, 09:41:35 PM
Mark, Andy, Steve:

This is excellent, very catchy.

Mark, don't worry about changes to my lyric.  I always feel the singer and melody person needs it to feel right too.  As long as the intent never changes, I have no problem. 
Please continue.

Paul
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: Albino on August 20, 2013, 04:47:23 AM
Thanks Paul and thanks to Mark for letting me play on this killer rock tune. It brought me right back to my early days and  the reason I picked up a pair of sticks in the first place.
Really good guitar work, pure rock.
Great to be working with you again Andy, a nice fat bass sound  8)
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: Zax on August 20, 2013, 04:53:30 PM
Sounds great, Mark!! 

Love the guitar riff, the guitar sound, and the very cool vocal style!!

Great contribution from Andy and Steve, and excellent lyrics from Paul!!

 8)  8)  8)

Regards,
Frank
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: AndyG6508 on August 21, 2013, 05:37:17 PM
Good to get this one done guys. This rocks nicely.

Mark - great composition and guitars, the solo is killer
Steve - your drums gave the song the sonic lift it needed.
Paul - quality lyric as always.

Thanks for inviting me along Mark.

Cheers
Andy
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: AndyG6508 on August 24, 2013, 11:44:29 PM
Hey Mark,

Got back home and listened on speakers and on the I-pod. Sounds great, thumbs up  8).

Love the bass sound you gave me!

Looking forward to the next rocker.

Cheers
Andy
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: rightonthemark on August 25, 2013, 12:24:56 AM
glad you approve Andy.
i gave it a high cut; boost the low & low/mids; compressor & chorus.
i tried to make it sound like your original audition.

thanks for your kind words Zax.
i started the guitar sound out as an attempt to combine a classic metal sound with a modern metal sound but had to back off so as not to compete with the bass for bottom end.
i ended up with a nice metal/chorus ala judas priest (you got another thing coming) mixed with a more dry straight forward classic crunch. it just felt right.

Steve, the pleasure was all mine. and if you like this hard rock/classic metal type stuff there's plenty more where that came from. \m/

glad you like how your lyrics were used --- they helped bring this tune to life

Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: Paulo on August 25, 2013, 05:44:29 AM
Yeh, nice rocker guys... Saxon is back in town  ;D
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: rightonthemark on August 25, 2013, 07:39:12 AM
Quote from: Paulo on August 25, 2013, 05:44:29 AM
Yeh, nice rocker guys... Saxon is back in town  ;D

thanks Paulo.
I'll take some denim and leather.
\m/
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: docmidnite on September 01, 2013, 12:14:35 PM
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Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: Tricia41 on September 10, 2013, 01:09:44 PM
Cool, It reminds me of Kiss.  8)
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: rightonthemark on September 16, 2013, 12:17:51 AM
thanks Tricia and Doc...
i appreciate the listen and kind gesture.
 \m/
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: CosmicDolphin on September 17, 2013, 03:22:24 PM
Good Rock track guys, nice performances.

Mix sounds good , I could have used a little more 'dirt' for the style but I enjoyed it all the same  :)
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: rightonthemark on September 17, 2013, 06:23:34 PM
thanks CD
i really appreciate the critique.
let's me know i'm headed in the right direction with mixing.
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: soulfrontier on October 08, 2013, 01:54:07 AM
Oh very nice Mark! Classic rock at its best. Your voice sounds great man! What a band, you all sound fantastic, great mix too.
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: rightonthemark on October 08, 2013, 02:41:16 AM
thanks for listening Holger.
glad you like.
hope to have some more rockers coming up.
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: stoman on October 09, 2013, 03:05:25 PM
That's a cool rocker, Mark, I really enjoyed the listen.

The mix is pretty good too. The chorus vocals may need some tweaking with Melodyne. Otherwise a really nice job IMO.

Regards,
  Steffen
Title: Re: Sweet Agony
Post by: rightonthemark on October 09, 2013, 06:14:48 PM
thanks Steffen.
glad you like.
and thanks for the mix critique.
let's me know I'm on the right track.
of course my vocals could always use a little help  :D
thanks again...