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Virtual Music Studio => Finished Works => Topic started by: Sharpola on June 14, 2007, 07:04:21 PM

Title: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: Sharpola on June 14, 2007, 07:04:21 PM

Done I hope! :)

Thanks to Brina for backing vocals!!
Thanks to Paul for the inspiring lyrics

With you, Yet without you  

(v1)
I've got this secret longing   
I don't think you can detect   
When our eyes meet my heart beats   
And no one else suspects   

(v2)
Watching your every move   
I try not to look too odd   
But no one cares, no one stares   
As I give you a nod       

(chorus)
I cherish these rendezvous' 
When I'm with you
I cherish these rendezvous' 
When I'm with you
Yet without you

(v3)
I feel unknown desires   
But I keep them well hidden   
I'm connected, but undetected   
As I taste the forbidden   

(v4)
You always check on me   
Asking if I'm okay     
I find I try for a simple reply     
But never know what to say   

(chorus)
I cherish these rendezvous' 
When I'm with you
I cherish these rendezvous' 
When I'm with you
Yet without you

(bridge)
But tomorrow I'll speak to you; I know I will
At least more than thank you
When you hand me the bill

(chorus)

Title: Re: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: MM on June 14, 2007, 09:16:06 PM

Great job all around folks!!!!

Mike

Title: Re: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: PVD on June 15, 2007, 10:11:27 AM

Ray:

Thanks for sticking with this, you've done an wonderful job and the BG vocals add a good feel.  Thanks Brina.  It's been a great experience to work with you and see my words come to life.  Hopefully there will be more times ahead.

PVD (Paul)

Title: Re: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: Studioplayer on June 15, 2007, 02:53:42 PM

Yeah Ray !!! That's really creative. Sounds fantastic. Very moody. The lyrics are really great !! I like how it kicks it up later in the song. Good stuff guys. 8)

I know you have completed this but.... IMHO I think the backings are are tad strong in the mix. They seem to be at the same level as the main vocals. Just during the first 2 choruses. 

But still. I would buy the CD  :)

Dave


 

Title: Re: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: Sharpola on June 15, 2007, 08:52:51 PM

Thanks Guys!

Dave, I'll have a listen tonight thanks!

Title: Re: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: Sharpola on June 15, 2007, 10:28:35 PM

Ok, I brought down the bg's a little and ran the mix through my newly aquired Finalizer, I just ran the Wizard on it..


Thanks Dave!

Ray   

Title: Re: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: Studioplayer on June 17, 2007, 03:31:59 AM

No problemo. Just going to check out the new mix. I just noticed it up there. I thought the harmonies would sit better in behind a bit more especially since it's a softer part of the song. I will give it a listen soon. :)

Great song Ray. You really should get a cd together. I'm sure you have more than enough.

Title: Re: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: Studioplayer on June 18, 2007, 01:11:38 PM

That sounds way better Ray. Perfect I would say. Always love your songs man. Great stuff !!  8) Nice ending btw.

Dave

Title: Re: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: Eddie on June 27, 2007, 10:25:50 PM

I really like this song - Great job everyone!

Title: Re: With you, Yet without you - Sharpola / PVD
Post by: NickT on June 27, 2007, 11:22:46 PM

Sounds great Ray!

Nice job. That finalizer sounds nice.

Overall a good feel.

Nick