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Virtual Music Studio => Finished Works => Topic started by: Captain fantastic on March 29, 2011, 10:11:26 AM
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Well this one features the beautifully sad poetry of Mr mom & the bells of Cyclone to a little music of mine.This has turned out to be a Sombre affair & a good vehicle for Mr mom poem,Empty Space.I think a person could go on forever making changes to a piece,perhaps I should have made it a little shorter or changed a line here..? However ,the poem fits the melancholic sound rather well,it wont be everyones cup of tea & it may be a touch to sad for some,but it is what it is.Here are the lyrics.
Verse 1. I used to occupy this space,but now I'm tired from demands within,must I be so vigilant
Chorus. To conceal in me, in life's greatest mystery
Verse2. And my life used to be a wondrous place,I filled the voids,of all my time & space
Chorus. Solitude,is this all that I have left
Verse 3. I'm just a speck in a sea of emptiness,Where is life's vigour,give a reason just to live
Chorus. Gone are the days,when I was so carefree
Spoken bridge. Those days are now replaced with tired eyes,no longer do I dream or fantasize
On a moonless night with no stars that shine,a broken record of a broken man
Escape his wish,his only plan
Verse 4. Held down the fort,till there was but nothing left,Just shattered dreams on an empty lonely quest
Chorus. He's a river ,dried up countless years ago
Verse 5. A silent scene that seems forever froze,His stagnant dream he wished he's never born
Chorus. Each time he thinks,of all that life should have been
Spoken. He occupied his space for many years,now theres a smile tucked beneath his tears
His stale routines no longer cause a sigh,his newest plan now sends his spirits high
The old man,simply waves ...& says Goodbye
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I love it Ralph! 8) 8)
Your vocals were perfect for just the right feel and attitude to complete this song. I really feel that music is often times the only way to broach subjects that don't get talked about, and when subjects see the light of day and get talked about - that has to be a GOOD thing... especially when it comes to politics, the environment, war, and so on.
Thanks for putting this all together Ralph, the solo at the end is just killer, and it still blows me away - the idea that cyclone had for using the bell.
Great stuff!!
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I love it Ralph! 8) 8)
Your vocals were perfect for just the right feel and attitude to complete this song. I really feel that music is often times the only way to broach subjects that don't get talked about, and when subjects see the light of day and get talked about - that has to be a GOOD thing... especially when it comes to politics, the environment, war, and so on.
Thanks for putting this all together Ralph, the solo at the end is just killer, and it still blows me away - the idea that cyclone had for using the bell.
Great stuff!!
yep,sometimes its hard just to say whats going on in your head,Here is the ape,its in 16 bit,I dont think the sound quality is diminished compared to 24 bit,
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Wow this mix sounds so much better cool song with cool words. Was banging my head tryin to come up with something to add then a bell went off. :)
Cyclone
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This is superb!! There's some interesting music going on here - and this is right in the middle of it!!
Love the brooding slice of progressive rock - it does have Floyd overtones but coupled with a modern prog sound to it as well.
The music fits the dark lyrics perfectly...everything is great!
The bell does clinch things in the end.
Well done John, Ralph and Cyclone - take a bow.
Cheers
Andy
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This is superb!! There's some interesting music going on here - and this is right in the middle of it!!
Love the brooding slice of progressive rock - it does have Floyd overtones but coupled with a modern prog sound to it as well.
The music fits the dark lyrics perfectly...everything is great!
The bell does clinch things in the end.
Well done John, Ralph and Cyclone - take a bow.
Thanks andy
Cheers
Andy
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Now that's Nice!...Great one fellers!
Wow, that "Cyclone" just rocked the end of our song too ::)
Consider yourselves twisted! ;D
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This is superb!! There's some interesting music going on here - and this is right in the middle of it!!
Love the brooding slice of progressive rock - it does have Floyd overtones but coupled with a modern prog sound to it as well.
The music fits the dark lyrics perfectly...everything is great!
The bell does clinch things in the end.
Well done John, Ralph and Cyclone - take a bow.
Cheers
Andy
Here is the package
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Hey Ralph,
Just to let you know that Ive picked up the package.
That end guitar solo is brilliant!!
Cheers
Andy
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Hey Ralph,
Inge is gonna play this tomorrow on her IMW Radio show, Serious-Music, from 2 - 4pm EST. I don't know what time that would be for where you live. Here's what she had to say:
"I like this song very much. Music and vocals incl. the production is sugar for my ears. Have downloaded for tomorrow for my radio show."
Cheers,
John
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Hey Ralph,
Inge is gonna play this tomorrow on her IMW Radio show, Serious-Music, from 2 - 4pm EST. I don't know what time that would be for where you live. Here's what she had to say:
"I like this song very much. Music and vocals incl. the production is sugar for my ears. Have downloaded for tomorrow for my radio show."
Cheers,
John
Nearly famous,think I'm about 8 hours ahead or behind,this is good news,you put a smile on my face
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Hi Ralph and John this is a really cool song and I've played it a few times this afternoon. And I have read John's Poem again to. You guys did a terrific job on the lyrics, vocals and music :). Everyone did a fantastic job! Thank you Ralph and John your friend Jimmy.
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8) cool vocal stuff going on
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Very well done, Gentlemen! 8)
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Very cool guys ...I love the dark feel to this
Ian :)
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Heavy Stuff...sounds good 8)
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