Musicians Collaboration Studio
Virtual Music Studio => Finished Works => Topic started by: Mr. Mom on November 17, 2012, 12:12:35 PM
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I had this sitting in my lyric section, but decided to post it in the Finished Forum since it was one of those one-and-done type of songs from over at 50/90. I wrote the lyrics to this haunting melody by Monty... then he found Jinx Montague to provide equally haunting vocals. I wrote this with the show "Deadliest Catch" and "The Perfect Storm" in mind. One of your typical (man vs sea - sea wins) type of ballad.
Lyrics: Me
Music and mix: L J Montgomery
Vocals: Jinx Montague
The Final Run
V1 - 0:07
Their bags are packed... They stand at the rail
Their steel horse... about to hit the trail
The kids and wives... all wave from the pier
When the ship departs... the loved ones say a prayer
V2 - 0:53
Ten hardy men... they all left their home
To battle the sea... while loved ones sleep alone
Another season... some bend, some break...
Is it worth the money... is it worth the pain... no... oh....
solo - 1:42
V3 - 2:25
The wind and waves ... began to grow
The crew all noticed... their steel horse riding low
No time for rescue... so they pray and wait
They knew that the next wave would soon seal their fate
Solo - 3:12
V4 - 3:35
So many good men... so many tears
Another widow... another year
Ten hardy men... they're not coming home
They battled the sea... and sank beneath the foam
Another season... another round of pain
The sea was hungry... ten more souls are claimed...
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Love the lyrics, John, however the song itself needs more dynamics to make it work better. Particularly in the vocal, comes across as a bit of a durge and is hard to listen to at length.
Mick.
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Very nice, John. I have to agree with Mick regarding the dynamics. It's mostly a mixing issue, the ingredients all seem to be there.
Do you have the seps, or can you get them? I would love to give it a try (and maybe some others too). Lovely vocals.
Regards,
Steffen
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Thanks Mick/Steffen, I think maybe I'll see if I can get Monty to join MCS... or at least provide the seps to see if more can be done with the mix. :)
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Great lyrics, sad matter, sad song!