Musicians Collaboration Studio
Virtual Music Studio => Finished Works => Topic started by: Casia - lyricist on September 24, 2008, 09:56:31 AM
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Lyrics: Katherine Wong (Casia)
Original composition and vocals: Tricia Dovidio
Music played and arranged: Bobby Watson
Watch The Sun Come Up
(V1)
I'm stuck in a dream where lovers are blind
A fire burns leaving ashes in my mind
A renegade cloud lingers in my room
Reminds me of my lonely nights
(CHORUS)
Open the door; climb in my bed
Take one step inside my head
You'll see the memories
Of every word we said
I'll walk a perfect line
To show that you're mine
Hold me, just hold me
We'll watch the sun come up
(V2)
Too many sips from my glass of wine
Wild thoughts running through my mind
Whispers that haunt in the middle of the night
Are a part of my secret life
(CHORUS)
Open the door; climb in my bed
Take one step inside my head
You'll find the memories
Of every word we said
I'll walk a perfect line
To show you you're mine
Hold me, just hold me
We'll watch the sun come up
(BRIDGE)
Hold me tight; stay with me tonight
I'll share my secrets, we'll be alright
Be the one to live in both of my worlds
And save me, just save me
We'll watch the sun come up
(OUTRO)
I'm stuck in a dream where lovers are blind
A fire burns leaving ashes behind
A renegade cloud lingers in my room
Reminds me of my lonely nights
Be the one to live in both of my worlds
And hold me, can't we
Watch the sun come up
(tag)
I wanna watch the sun come up
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Hi:
Tricia I just wanted to thank you personally for a wonderful composition and amazing vocals. I love it.
Thanks Bobby for playing this for us and arranging it all :).
Later...Casia
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Thanks Casia for such sweet lyrics. :)
Thanks Bobby. :)
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Very nice work guys ..... super stuff ;D
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If you don't mind, Tricia, can I have a dry ape of your vocal on this song.
I just want to do a little experimentation, since no one else ever picked up on the actual music.
Thanks,
BW@
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Sure Bobby. I have to find it. :)
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Thanks Ian. :)
Here you go Bobby.
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Got it, thanks :)
BW@
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Another nice tune. Very sweet. 8) Man.. you girls are just a writing and singing machine. I think you 2 are having way too much fun. Keep going !! :) Nice song Bobby! :)
Dave
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Wow...you're busy Casia! Guess Juice is getting really jealous here Tricia...the album must be turning into a reality soon as well! ;D
It's definetely in the same league soundwise as Sundials..burning these while their still free :) (don't worry, I'll still buy it when it comes out!)
Great job everyone!
Marc
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Thanks guys, Yes, too much fun and yes, Juice is jealous. He doesn't know what I'm singing,,,,, he's jealous because I fall asleep while we watch tv at night.... or I can't hear him talking because I have headphones on all the time. :-[ I better go give him some love. :-\ ;D ;)
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;D Yes Tricia, go give Juice some love .... and then get back to what's really important ;D ;D ;D :o :o
Thanks Dave and Marc. It's hard not to have fun hanging around here. But, I'm gonna try REALLY hard to write some different kinds of lyrics without death or loneliness in them...... :-\ Uhmmmm! What else is there :-\...help!!
Later...Casia
(Hey - News Bulletin just came in while I posted this: Does this mean we should remove this and take it back into the studio ;D )
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As a result of a PM, that answer would be no.
I guess, just let it go. Although, I have to say, I'm not happy with the music arrangement as is.
Good luck with your collaborations, folks.
I'm back to my own projects, that need attention.
BW@
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Reading the last comments, the only negative thing I have to say on it is the production values, ditch those cheesy drum machine drums, get a real drummer on it, bring up the beat..get a master mixer here like Nick or Mark to handle production, and you're all set :)
Marc
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I agree, the mix could (and probably should) be much better. But still I love the song. :)
Later,
Steffen
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This is the best that 2 non-musician women can do.
We tried to get help. Oh well. It's good enough for me.
no biggie. No one's getting paid.
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Hey. I think you guys are being too hard on this tune. This is all just for fun. Not every song has to be a huge production. I really like this tune. It's the feeling that counts. :)
IF...you were to redo this. Keep the keys and vocals. Redo the drums and add some guitars. Put in a small spot between the vocals for a nice melodic guitar or keyboard solo to break things up. That's about it. Maybe you just took this off the pot before it boiled. There so many songs on the go right now that it's hard to see and get to them all. Some just take more time.
What we need here is more players that are willing to work on other peoples songs and not only their own. We all need to contribute. :)
Dave
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Hi Everyone: (DAVE: you just beat me posting here ;D)
Gee! We're getting more replies here than we did when we asked for help in the Project Studio. Kinda ironic don't you think.
This song has been sitting around for quite some time. I was extremely pleased what Bobby did for us (Thanks Bobby). We decided to give this one a final "kick in the butt" and say "enough" is "enough", let's move on to something new and not worry about it, no-one is interested. Thus, here we are in "Finished Collaboration' Land ;D, not living up to the expectations of a "Finished" collaboration :o :o.
I think we'll just put this in the "burning heap" >:D and quietly let it disapear into No-man's land and I shall live forever with the pain of a "failed collaboration" ;D ;D ;D....Whoa's Me...Pain what is thy destiny. (Tricia and I still like it - I think it's pretty good for two amateurs - that's how we learn).
Later...Casia
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I don't think we failed.
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I'll put it up acapella with tons of reverb and use a Vintage Channel Warmer. ;D Then we'll really get heck.
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No failure at all :o !. Good mix or bad mix, the song is great! If you are happy with it, then we should all be happy with it. :)
Later,
Steffen
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I'll put it up acapella with tons of reverb and use a Vintage Channel Warmer. ;D Then we'll really get heck.
Now you're stealing all my production secrets :P
It's a decent song and you finished it, which makes it a cut above all the unfinished ones in my book.
CD
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great song,
This was on my add something new every day not finished yet list.
Well Done
cyclone